Mystery Revealed WIPpet Style

Having Monday off really threw me for a loop. I suddenly realized it was Tuesday and I needed to get my WIPpet post written. Hmm…today is the third. Three little words, perhaps…

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/\ is the best image EVAH, given the monkey and all. Yeah, if you’ve been hanging around here for a while, you’ll understand.

But, I digress. WIPpet. I left you last week with Janni startling some man by the fence. Now, I could give you three sentences. Three paragraphs. Or shall I whip up some complicated WIPpet math? Naw, I’ll just add the month to the date and give you twelve short paragraphs. This picks up immediately after last week’s:

He fumbled after the shoe in his hand, almost dropping it before he turned to face her.

“Oh, it’s you,” he said.

Amazing. Without the doublet and shoes, in nothing but a thin white tunic and wet hair, Dachus Branacous almost passed for a decent looking man. Would have, if not for the haughty arch to his brow, and the arrogant twist to his lips and nose.

“You should be a bit more grateful to see me Mr. Branacous,” Janni said. She smiled, trying to make it look sincere, and not as predatory as it felt. “I have some good news for you.”

His brown eyes widened. “You’re selling me a dragon?”

Janni scowled. “No.”

Irritation replaced…what had it been? Relief? Disbelief? He picked at the bottom of his shoe with a sharpened stick, flicking dragon dung through the air, his mouth pinched.

“Not curious as to what the good news is?”

He waved the stick but didn’t look at her. “It doesn’t matter. If you’re not selling me a dragon–” He shook his head.

“Well, all right. I thought perhaps you were hungry and would join us for dinner. After which I’ll be reviewing new dragons and…” Janni started to turn away. “But, if you’re not interested, then I guess you’ll just be on your way.”

“I don’t know how I can be any more plain about that. I can’t be on my way. Not without a dragon.” He stared forlornly at his shoes, then shook one at Janni. “Do you realize I had to spend a month’s wages on these?”

“Next time watch where you step, or buy cheaper footwear. Something more practical. Maybe in a boot instead of a shoe. And without that gaudy buckle.”

So, how many of you guessed correctly last week? Hope you weren’t terribly disappointed that the ‘mystery man’ turned out to be Dachus.

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29 responses

  1. I wondered if it were him, but then I thought that was probably too obvious. Sometimes I need to not over-think things.

    I like how he mentions the cost of the shoes as though he expects Jannis to care.

    September 3, 2014 at 5:50 am

    • And he does expect her to care, that’s the pathetic part. Everyone should care. Poor, Dachus. *grins*

      September 4, 2014 at 6:34 pm

  2. Before I started blogging I had never read any fantasy novels at all. I find now that I have connected with a lot of fantasy authors and I really enjoyed this excerpt. I shall try my best to tune in next week as well! 🙂

    September 3, 2014 at 6:10 am

    • Thanks, Jade. I’m glad blogging has propelled you into the world of fantasy. It’s quite an interesting place to visit.

      September 4, 2014 at 6:35 pm

  3. Amy

    Mojo Jojo! “I do not reiterate, repeat and reinstate the same thing over and over again. I am clear, concise, to the point!” I love him.

    I assumed it wasn’t Dachus because that seemed too obvious. I’m not disappointed at all—I’m enjoying their interactions.

    September 3, 2014 at 8:50 am

    • To be honest, I don’t even know who he is, but the gif spoke to me so…viola!

      Ah ha! So the obvious became the unobvious. My evil plan is even more evil than I thought.

      September 4, 2014 at 6:36 pm

      • Amy

        Ha! He’s one of the bad guys from Powerpuff Girls. You definitely need to find a YouTube clip of him—he’s hilariously awful and prone to being excessively verbose. The quote I used is from an episode where Bubbles, the blue PP girl, thinks she’s Mojo Jojo.

        September 6, 2014 at 2:06 pm

  4. Gotta love Mojo Jojo and the Powerpuff Girls!
    I didn’t know that was Dachus!!! I thought he was an ex-boyfriend or something. I’m also not disappointed. Nice to know that Dachus is hot. 🙂

    September 3, 2014 at 10:27 am

    • Dachus may be a dork, but he’s not a bad looking dork. Now, if he can just lose the pampered air…

      September 4, 2014 at 6:37 pm

  5. Great excerpt Kathi. And no I didn’t guess it was Dachus. Nicely portrayed conversation between them. I like Dachus’ moodiness and Jannis’ plain speaking. 🙂

    September 3, 2014 at 10:29 am

    • Thanks, Elaine. Yeah, Janni just lays it out there, doesn’t she? I’m guessing subtlety isn’t something one develops around dragons.

      September 4, 2014 at 6:38 pm

  6. I can’t say I had any inkling to who the man was. Seems obvious it had to be him now that I’ve read this. Awesome. 😀

    September 3, 2014 at 1:01 pm

    • 🙂 Read straight through, in context, I’m thinking it would have been more obvious.

      September 4, 2014 at 6:38 pm

      • It’s entirely possible I missed something or missed a segment. I don’t always make it to your WIPs. ❤

        September 5, 2014 at 10:01 am

  7. I love the back and forth between them.

    September 3, 2014 at 5:11 pm

    • Thanks, Fallon. For some reason it comes very naturally when I’m writing it.

      September 4, 2014 at 6:39 pm

  8. The chortling monkey is SO YOU. 🙂

    Love the name Dachus Branacous and his singleminded desire to procure a dragon from the unwilling Janni. Love the characters’ interaction – their animosity toward one another really adds some verve to the scene!

    September 4, 2014 at 12:46 am

    • See! I thought so, too. I love that monkey. 🙂

      September 4, 2014 at 6:39 pm

  9. Janni is so practical and straight forward. I feel like I need to be friends with her because she’d always tell me if I had food in my teeth or was making an idiot out of myself.

    September 4, 2014 at 9:15 am

    • Yes, she definitely would at that. 😉 And you know she’d have your back.

      September 4, 2014 at 6:40 pm

  10. Continuing to enjoy the interaction between these two — and now you are starting to make Dachus more likeable … where will that lead, I wonder? *g*

    September 4, 2014 at 9:18 am

    • More likeable? Eek! I must do something to change that. Hee, hee.

      September 4, 2014 at 6:41 pm

  11. I love the power puff girls!! And the monkey… Yeah, I remember that monkey during my interview… it stole my shoes!!!!!

    I love your humor. The bantering back and forth between these two is entertaining, as your dialogue usually is. “I can’t be on my way. Not without a dragon!” That made me laugh 🙂

    September 4, 2014 at 11:06 am

    • I don’t recall any monkey stealing any shoes. Perhaps you left your shoes in exchange for your life…um…cookies. In exchange for cookies. *smiles sweetly*

      I’m glad you’re getting a chuckle from it. It’s probably the lightest thing I’ve ever written.

      September 4, 2014 at 6:42 pm

  12. My, my. So Dachus is an actual person under all that pomp. Maybe. So nice of him to re-irritate Janni for us. Otherwise, the glorious vengeance she has planned might never be revealed to us. It sounded like she had something truly spectacular in mind. *wicked grin*

    September 4, 2014 at 6:07 pm

    • Hopefully she’ll see fit to share with me exactly what that ‘something truly spectacular’ is. Because coming from her, it really needs to be, doesn’t it?

      September 4, 2014 at 6:43 pm

      • That sort of seems to be the way you’ve set her up. At least, it sounds that way in my head when I read it. I envision this vibrant, head-strong woman with just a little more creativity and gumption than is really good for her. I sense that she has enormous self-discipline when it suits her to have it (like when she’s handling her duties as dragon-keeper) and very little when it doesn’t.

        September 4, 2014 at 6:56 pm

  13. Surely that’s more than an invitation to dinner? She’ll show off those new dragons and if he’s less preoccupied with his shoes, he may become . . . the owner of a dragon? Nice developments.

    September 5, 2014 at 11:26 pm

  14. I totally knew it was Dachus! I didn’t even need the doublet on the fence. =)

    You may have flying monkeys, but *I* have Mad Intuitive Powers! (BWAHAHAHA!)

    I really am loving these two. Their interactions kinda remind me of this couple I know who make being locked together in a cell seem a lot more fun, and maybe more dangerous, than it has any right to be…

    And Dachus with a stick, trying to clean dragon poo off his shoe while Janni critiques his fashion choices and refuses -AGAIN! – to just be reasonable and sell him a dragon….now that’s priceless! =D

    September 9, 2014 at 4:32 am

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